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Your English speaking friend ask you to help with collectorate project your she is doing about celebrating new year in different countries write a letter to your friend in your letter say how important New Year it to people in your country describe how new year is celebrated in your country explain what you like about new year celebration in your country

#english #friend #collectorate #project #year #countries #people #country #celebration
Hope
this
 letter
find
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 you
with
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in
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the
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apply
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good health. Today I am explaining how important it is for New Year
celebratation
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celebration
celebrations
 in my country.
To begin
 with, New Year is always celebrated with joy and happiness
along
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with relatives and friends gathering together
exchanging
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to exchange
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their
greeting
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greetings
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 and respect towards each other
along with
 lunch accompanied by snacks specially prepared for the New Year. To explain,what I like most is family Union as
this
 apart throughout period
tend
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tends
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to be present in their home for celebration
this
 promotes love and joy towards member of the family
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a clear structure with a proper introduction, body, and closing. This makes it easier to follow your ideas.
task achievement
Make sure all ideas are fully developed. For instance, provide more details on how New Year is celebrated and what you find enjoyable about it.
general
Polish your writing for grammar and punctuation. For example, 'Hope this letter find you with the good health' should be 'I hope this letter finds you in good health'.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriately informal, which is suitable for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
You have included key information about New Year celebrations in your country, which addresses the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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