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The bar chart below shows the preference for different types of Complementary or Alternative Medicine (CAM) therapies among US adults in 2007. The table lists which therapies where the most popular over two years. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the preference for different types of Complementary or Alternative Medicine (CAM) therapies among US adults in 2007. The table lists which therapies where the most popular over two years. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
chart
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 and the
table
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provides
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 us
information
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 about the preference for different types of Complementary or Alternative Medicine
therapies
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 and
most
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the most
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 popular kinds of
therapies
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 among US adults in 2007. Looking from an
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 perspective, the significant
therapies
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 on the
table
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 became more popular through the years. On the bar
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,
therapies
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 are shown from the most common to the least common, amongst adults. Looking at the
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, Deep Breathing increased from 10.6% to 14.8%. Meditation was a bit smaller, it went from 8.6% in 2002 to 10.5% in 2007.
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 equaled only 5% and in 2007 it grew to 8.6%.
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, Yoga from 2002 to 2007 expanded only from 5.1% to 7.1%.
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, 18% of people choose Natural Products,
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 13% provide Deep Breathing techniques. Meditation, Chiropractic, Massage and Yoga
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 somewhere around 9%. The least preferable
therapies
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 were Diet-Based
Therapies
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, Progressive Relaxation,
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, Guided Imagery and Homeopathic Treatment. Their ranges were all
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 4%. Both the
chart
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 and the
table
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 show that Deep Breathing and Meditation are
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 of the most popular
therapies
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 used by many adult individuals.
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, the
favor
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of
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 other
therapies
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,
such
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 as Yoga and Massage,
also
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 grew through these years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, table, therapies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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