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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came form and the chars show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came form and the chars show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts
source
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the source
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 of
money
 from different categories and pie charts
explains
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explain
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 how
money
 was distributed in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
, the most
money
 in the police budget came from
national
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the national
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 government in both years and the least from the other sources. The
money
 was spent on salaries the most in both years.
Total
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The total
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 police budget accounted for 304.7
m
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million
 pounds in 2017 and slightly higher, 318.6
m
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million
 pounds in 2018. The national government was the main source of income, which was 175 and 177 in 2017 and 2018, respectively. Local taxes accounted for 91 and 102
m
2017
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in 2017
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 and 2018, respectively.
Source
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The source
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 of income in the police budget was nearly the same amount, 38 and 38.5m pounds. Now on expenditures, the most amount of
money
distributed
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was distributed
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 to salaries, which was
a
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the
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 fourth quarter in 2017 and 69% in 2018. Spending on technology increased from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018. Expenditure on buildings and transport was
same
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the same
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, 17% in both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • allocation
  • funding sources
  • national government
  • local taxes
  • expenditure
  • distribution
  • categories
  • spending
  • salaries
  • technology
  • infrastructure
  • buildings
  • transport
  • financial year
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • economic factors
  • policy changes
  • comparisons
  • significant/noticeable changes
  • priorities
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