Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other s think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own oipinion.

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Many people believe that advertising has become so popular that we are not noticing them anymore,

while

others think that they still can persuade us to buy significant products.

This

essay will discuss both views and argue in

favor

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of the latter. Some advertisements can have a huge impact on our

behavior

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. The main reason for their existence is to drown our attention. They are very

colorful

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and funny

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so that we could remember them for a bit longer and

additionally

, go buy these products.

Furthermore

, producers pay many celebrities to recommend their products and

as a result

, we can be easily convinced by our idols to purchase more things.

On the other hand

, commercials on

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started to annoy the audience.

While

watching the movie, breaks for the advertisements became very long and people started to do something else during the break,

for instance

cooking some food or even taking a shower.

Also

, many individuals decide to buy

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access

streaming

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platforms. These platforms are providing the same films and series but people are not bothered by the commercials anymore. In my opinion, we are still vulnerable to buying a plethora of things. We live in a world, where everything is cheap and easily accessible.

Although

our generation is more aware of climate change, advertisements have a huge impact on us and are making us addicted to shopping and

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owning everything we can.

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everything that has been said, commercials are not that popular anymore, thanks to easy access to the Internet.

Nevertheless

, they can still have

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on our daily

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and on the growing problem of consumerism.

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Provide more specific examples and evidence to support the main points in each paragraph. For instance, mention specific advertisements or trends in advertising.

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Ensure that each main point is elaborated upon to improve comprehensiveness. Try to include data or studies where applicable to strengthen arguments.

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Improve logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next. Use linking phrases and sentences to create a more cohesive flow.

coherence cohesion

While the introduction and conclusion are strong, make sure the body paragraphs are equally well-developed and each point is directly tied back to the central argument of the essay.

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The essay presents a balanced discussion of both views regarding advertising's effectiveness and impact.

coherence cohesion

The introduction clearly states the topic and provides an overview of the discussion.

coherence cohesion

The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and provides a clear opinion.

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

273 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumer behavior
emotional appeals
endorsements
targeted messaging
data analytics
social media
personalize
effectiveness
psychological principles
scarcity effect
social proof
reciprocity
ubiquity
ad fatigue
desensitized
ad-blockers
overexposure
skeptical
authenticity
motive

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