Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
Hi mum and dad,
It has
a
been a Correct article usage
apply
while
Linking Words
Correct word choice
since i
i
wrote a letter to you since I graduated from university. I miss both of you so much, how the progress on Change the capitalization
I
Correct article usage
the refrushied
refrushied
garage, I heard Dad wants to reinvent it into a workshop. hope it going well.
The reason I writing to you is I have decided to become a pilot as my career. As you know, I have been attracted to Correct your spelling
refreshed
airplanes
since I was a juvenile. Change the spelling
aeroplanes
Furthermore
, Linking Words
i
have studied aerodynamic engineering Change the capitalization
I
in
University and actively joined an aeroplane enthusiast club that provides flight simulation workshops every week. I should be capable of applying for the jobs.
Change preposition
at
Besides
, I have been on vacation with Joe and others. We have to travel to various Linking Words
on
benches to play surfing. It is challenging but enjoyable when you achieve a complex move that others can not imagine.
Best Wishes
ManChange preposition
apply
Submitted by andy1031227 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
coherence cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs to enhance readability and coherence. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea.
task achievement
Proofread your letter for grammatical errors and ensure proper capitalization, especially for words like 'I' and 'Dad'.
task achievement
Include more details and structure your response to cover all points more completely. For instance, explicitly mention the benefits you would bring to the potential employer as well as how you would spend your free time in Australia.
task achievement
You have demonstrated enthusiasm for the job and touched upon relevant experience, which is very good.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is affectionate and personal, which is well-suited for writing to parents.