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The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The present bar and line graph compare data about both reasons and the number of
people
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 who had different ranges of living
years
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 of immigrating to the United Kingdom between 2000 and 2008.
Overall
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, most of the
people
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 preferred living in the UK for up to 2
years
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;
furthermore
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, a large group of
people
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 came to England for work.
According to
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 the line chart which shows the figures for time that
people
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 spent in the UK, the first time was less than 2
years
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 which started in 2001, the same as the upper 4
years
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 150;
then
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 increased moderately to 250 in 2004, but the trend had stabilized until 2008. The second one was
people
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 who wanted to live more than 4
years
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 had steadiness. The third was
people
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 who had lived from 2 to 4
years
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.
In addition
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,
this
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 line had risen slightly because at the beginning had 50. Later it grew to 100 in 2008. The pie diagram illustrates the initial reason migrated to the UK was working with 38%.
Secondly
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, was study that was nearly the same as working after that join family was the third reason;
moreover
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, no reason stated had absolutely the same as other by 7 per cent.
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