The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many people participated in five different types of activities at a particular social
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located in Melbourne, Australia, during the course of 20 years, commencing from 2000.
Overall
, the trends for the film club and martial arts were relatively stable.
Additionally
, there were significant increases in the numbers of participants for table tennis and musical performances,
whereas
the opposite was true in the case of amateur dramatics. During the whole period, the film club consistently registered the highest participation rate, maintaining around 65
members
, despite a slight drop to a low of 60 in 2010.
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, the membership
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martial
art
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fluctuated but it was not as high as the film club,
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30 and 36 participants throughout. Meanwhile, amateur dramatics was the only activity to witness a downward trend.
Although
it rose minimally from approximately 26 to
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at nearly 30
members
in the first five years, it
then
underwent a continual decline and became the least popular activity by the end of the period.
In contrast
, table tennis saw a gradual rise in popularity, starting from around 16
members
and reaching 20
members
by 2010.
Similarly
, musical performances, which began in 2005, experienced rapid growth, reaching nearly 20 participants after 15 years.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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