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The plan below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the changes in the hall between 1985 and now.
Overall
, the university has experienced major changes in the size of the playing
fields
, the construction of various sports, educational facilities and the car park. From 1985 to the present, the population of the academy increased from 1,500 students to 2,300 students. In the northwest of the academy, the car park was rectangular next to a road and surrounded by another road which led to the playing
fields
 on the other side of the school.
However
, at present,
this
 car park has been reshaped into a semicircle and the road running to the playing
fields
 in the centre of the campus was demolished to make way for trees. In the south, the library has been replaced by a learning resources centre with a computer room. A new building of classrooms and a fitness centre with an indoor pool have been built on the west of the playing
fields
. The 2-storey block of classrooms was upgraded to 3 storeys, accompanied by another classroom block to its south
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task achievement
Ensure that all changes in the maps are explicitly mentioned to provide a full response. For example, information about the exact changes to playing fields needs more detail.
coherence cohesion
Add a brief conclusion to summarize the major changes and provide closure to the essay.
coherence cohesion
Clear structure with well-organized paragraphs that describe different areas of the school.
task achievement
The essay covers the primary changes at the school, including new buildings, facilities, and changes to existing structures.

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