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Every year large number of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of migration for the individual and society as a whole.

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Nowadays we are observing dozens of
people
 migrating from one nation to another having
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positive effects but
also
 drawbacks for both individuals and
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society. To start with, having a lot of migrants can have some benefits given more
people
 equals
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more
resource
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.
People
 who change their countries tend to become
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example
individual
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 in new environments, which results in them having a better impact on society.
Therefore
, it is a win-win situation for both countries and
people
. Say, I had a friend who moved to Germany and now working twice as hard.
Nevertheless
, there can be some concerns. Some
people
 leave their country because they cannot become
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good individual for their society,
this
 concludes in their
behavior
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 being unchanged, or even worse in some cases. It is
due to
 the fact that by and large
people
 do not change for
better
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 good.
Thus
, in the new
environment
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 they act in a bad fashion, turn into criminals and so on. A case in point, I read
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 a magazine a few days ago about Pakistani migrants moving to
UK
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 and committing crimes, it turned out they were criminals before. In conclusion, even though there are
utmost
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people
 who migrate
due to
 lack of employment, to
be
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 in better life quality cannot perceive their dreams as disadvantages outcomes the advantages.
However
, the improving systems aid those
people
 who will do better.
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