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The given table illustrates the survey students took at the university over 10 years.

The given table illustrates the survey students took at the university over 10 years.
Overall
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, there are 5 different aspects in which Print
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 got the highest positive feedback from the students meanwhile
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 of Modules
being
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was
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 the lowest. In
early
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2000’s
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, Print
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 was in
the
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apply
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first place regarding
good
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 rating, followed by Building
being
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in
the
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second place with 77
percent
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, which is the same for the next 10 years (77%).
As to the
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 third place,
it
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belonged to Technical Quality which did not have a drastic change over
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 (65, 63 and 69
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).
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, Electronic
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 was the second lowest,
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however
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 it had a dramatic increase from 2000
till
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to
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 2005 by 27% (45 to 72) and from the years 2005
till
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to
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 2010 by 16% (72 to 88). By the end it became one of the highest positive feedback receivers
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, both getting 88%.
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 of Modules offered got the lowest percentage of all over the decade namely decreased from 32 to 30 and
then
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 to 27%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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