The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995 2002

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995 2002
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This
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bar chart depicts the total
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of minutes of three
types
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of calls in the UK from 1995 to 2002. The local call category always had the highest total
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across the years, and it peaked in 1999. Meanwhile, the mobile call
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had the
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even though it tended to increase significantly. In 1995, the local call
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had over 70
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which was significantly higher than the national and international and mobile call
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which had approximately 38
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and below 5
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minutes, respectively.
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, all call
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had risen gradually over the years except in 2000 when the local call
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number
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dropped for the first time from 90
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to around 85
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.
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, local calls continued
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over the years until 2002.
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, mobile call
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jumped significantly in 2000 to almost double of the previous year,
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it became 24
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and it continued to increase to the peak at approximately 47
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in 2002. Meanwhile, the national and international call
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number
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was slightly above 60
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and the local call
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number
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decreased back to around the initial
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, a little above 70
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. In conclusion, the
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of calls in three
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of calls fluctuated except for mobile calls which always increased every year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, types, type, billion with synonyms.
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