The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995 2002

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995 2002
This
bar chart depicts the total
number
of minutes of three
types
of calls in the UK from 1995 to 2002. The local call category always had the highest total
number
across the years, and it peaked in 1999. Meanwhile, the mobile call
type
had the
least
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number
even though it tended to increase significantly. In 1995, the local call
types
had over 70
billion
which was significantly higher than the national and international and mobile call
types
which had approximately 38
billion
and below 5
billion
minutes, respectively.
However
, all call
types
had risen gradually over the years except in 2000 when the local call
type
number
dropped for the first time from 90
billion
to around 85
billion
.
Furthermore
, local calls continued
dropped
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over the years until 2002.
In contrast
, mobile call
type
jumped significantly in 2000 to almost double of the previous year,
hence
it became 24
billion
and it continued to increase to the peak at approximately 47
billion
in 2002. Meanwhile, the national and international call
type
last
number
was slightly above 60
billion
and the local call
type
number
decreased back to around the initial
number
, a little above 70
billion
. In conclusion, the
number
of calls in three
types
of calls fluctuated except for mobile calls which always increased every year.
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