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The diagram below shows how leather goods are produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows how leather goods are produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.
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The picture depicts the eleven stages of leather items manufacturing from
the
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raw animal material. After being naturally dried in the wind and sun ,the hide is carefully
transfered
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transferred
 to the plants for
further
 procedures.
Next
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 stage starts with cleaning the given
skin
 in
the
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 mixture of water and lime substance.
Afterwards
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 the pure matter is placed under the pressing machine ,followed by keeping it for being softer in the blend of water and vegetable oil .
This
 phase is followed
with
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 flattering,which means that the
skin
 is getting through the press machine.
Next
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 process is keeping the pressed leather material in tannin,the blended water and vegetable material. Contrary to soaking in
lime
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the lime
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 mixture ,in
this
 blend the
skin
 becomes softer and ,
consequently
,it is easier
undergone
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to
polishing
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. The following phase is transporting via vans to the various plants , where multi-purposed leather gods are
producing
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.
At
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 the
end
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 the raw animal
skin
 is modified into
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shoes,bags,balls and other products.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words skin with synonyms.
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