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The picture show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The picture illustrates how tomato ketchup is produced from tomato through 15 stages. The process commences
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 when the ripe tomatoes are collected and placed in baskets.
Next,
the fruit is assorted into qualitative and tainted, which is conveyed to the works. In the
plants
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 the harvest is peeled and purged from
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, seeds and skin. In the following stage, the cleaned-out berries are gathered into huge metal containers, where they are smashed. Afterwards, some
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such
 as sugar, vinegar and salt, are added and mixed. The ready blend is boiled over high heat until done. After that, it is left to cool for two hours, in order to pour it over the bottles. After filling, the bottles with ketchup are stuck with stickers, which show
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detailed information about ingredients and
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 before date. During the next stage, the finished product goes through quality control and is collected in boxes.
Finally
, the fabric is ready for sale, which is distributed to the supermarkets, in the proper way consumers can enjoy
this
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 dressing.
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Provide more specific examples and details where appropriate. For instance, names of steps or additional details can help clarify the process.
coherence cohesion
Ensure transitions between steps are smooth and logical. This can help the reader easily understand the sequence and relationships between stages.
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The introduction gives a clear overview of the process by mentioning the number of stages involved.
coherence cohesion
There is an effective use of sequencing words (e.g., 'next,' 'afterwards,’ 'finally') which helps to guide the reader through the stages of the process.
introduction conclusion present
The concluding sentence wraps up the description nicely by relating the final product to the consumer's experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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