The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The line chart indicates
the
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information about the amount of time that immigrants
stay
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at
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in
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UK
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the UK
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in
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for
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8
years
,
while
the pie chart shows the reasons for
migration
to
UK
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in 2008.
It is clear that
in
first
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the first
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two
years
, most people settled in
UK
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the UK
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for 4
yeras
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years
, but after
that
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that,
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they
were
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staied
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stained
stayed
for 2
yers
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years
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or more.
Moreover
, the biggest reason for
migration
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the migration
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of the population to
UK
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the UK
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was work in 2008. It could be seen that the number of people who
choosed th
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chose the
UK
for maintaining for 2
years
after
migration
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the migration
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was the same all over the 8
years
,
by
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with
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150 population,
while
, the public who were living for 4
years
started from 150 numbers and rose to 250 in 2004,
then
remain the same all over the period. The number nation who lived in
UK
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between 2 to 4
years
increased by fluctuation and
reched
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reached
100 in 2008. Meanwhile, in 2008, the majority of the society
choosed
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chose
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UK
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as the
distination
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destination
for
migration
because of work and study
by
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38% and 32% respectively. 16 per cent of these people just went for
acompany
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a company
and join their family in
UK
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the UK
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.
Also
, the proportion
for
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nation
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nations
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who had no
reson
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reason
and had
othe
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other
reasons
were
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was
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the same, by 7%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, years, migration with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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