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In the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless.The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantagous?

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Technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds around the world. In the upcoming years, all
vehicles
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 will be turning into autonomous
vehicles
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such
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 as buses,
cars
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 and trucks. These automobiles will be the passengers and
people
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 will
travel
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 inside the
vehicles
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. I think
driverless
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cars
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 have more
benefits
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 than drawbacks.
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 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are two primary merits of autonomous
vehicles
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. One of the key advantages is that
traffic
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 congestion will be reduced by using
this
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 kind of
vehicle
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.
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 is,
people
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 will
travel
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 without waiting in
traffic
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due to
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 these car's software
program
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programs
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 will know the road
of
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traffic
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free
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. Another crucial advantage is that it's suitable for long
travel
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,
people
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 will not get
tiredness
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 because of
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is
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in
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driverless
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cars
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, so everyone can go beyond the limits.
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, truck drivers who do not sleep and drive
vehicles
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 at night,
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this
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these
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is
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are
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 the most desirable
vehicles
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 for them and they
also
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take
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relax and sleep at night. These are the main
benefits
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 of autonomous
cars
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. Despite of advantages, there are two significant demerits of
driverless
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 buses. One of the important disadvantages is that job loss, countless persons who receive income from driving jobs like drivers.
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 is, the majority of individuals will suffer unemployment because of
the
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electronic
vehicles
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. Another disadvantage is that
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the vehicle's
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vehicle's
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vehicle
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cost
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costs
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 might
be increased
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,
consequently
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, all
people
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 will not afford
this
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 kind of car,
only
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and only
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 the affluent community can buy and use it.
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 situation will bring discrimination in society.
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, the first electronic car which is Tesla, rich
people
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 only use and buy because of the price difference in normal
cars
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 and electronic
cars
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. These are the demerits of autonomous buses. In conclusion, technology plays a crucial role in
people
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's lives. Reducing
traffic
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 congestion and tiredness of long
travel
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 are the
benefits
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 of
driverless
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vehicles
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.
Creating unemployment
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 for drivers
as well as
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 rich populations can only afford
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vehicle
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 because of the high costs are the
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 of electronic
cars
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.
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Although
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However
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, I think
autonomous
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the autonomous
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vehicle
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 has more
benefits
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 than drawbacks.
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Ensure each paragraph focuses on one main idea and develop it thoroughly. Try to make your points more distinct and separate to improve clarity.
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Provide more relevant and specific examples to support your arguments. Clear examples can make your claims more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs. This will help improve the logical flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitions and aim for a more varied vocabulary to keep the reader engaged. Using synonyms and paraphrasing can help with this.
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Your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, showing a balanced approach.
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The essay reflects a good understanding of the topic and attempts to explore different dimensions of the issue.
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