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These charts show cinema visits for all age of groups.

These charts show cinema visits for all age of groups.
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The table illustrates the percentage and frequency of
cinema
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 visitation,
while
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 the chart shows visit information which differentiates into four range of
age
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 categorizations (14-24
years
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 old, 25-34
years
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 old, 35-49
years
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 old, and more than 50
years
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 old) between 1994 and 2002 with two
years
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 interval.
Overall
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, it is clear from the table that the proportion of
cinema
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visitors
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 rose gradually, but the iteration of visits saw a downward trend. In terms of moviegoers’
age
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 group, youngsters between 14-24
years
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 old dominated the categories. To commence, in 1994, the table accounted for moviegoers who visited the
cinema
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 at 67% with a prevalence of 10,7. The percentage of
visitors
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 increased moderately by 5 % in 1996 and remained constant at 72% in 1998, though the figure presented a decrease in frequent visits from 11,3 to 8,3. In 2000, there was a slight decline to 70% with a visit rate of 8,4 and it levelled off at 72% and 8,3 in 2002.
According to
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 the chart, visiting the
cinema
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 was the most popular for the young generation under 25
years
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 old from 1994 to 2002. The figures depicted an increase and peaked at just over 10
visitors
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 for all
age
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 classifications in 1996.
Then
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, in 1998, they dropped drastically from 13 to 8
visitors
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, 12 to 7
visitors
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, and 10 to 5
visitors
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 for 14-24-year-olds, 25-34-year-olds, and more than 35-year-olds respectively. The chart continued to increase to 10 for below the range
age
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 of 25
years
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 old, 8 for 25-34
years
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 old and over 50
years
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 old, and 6 for 35-49
years
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 old.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, age, years, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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