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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.

The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
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This
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 graph illustrates the
number
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 of three different
students
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 who study abroad from 2002 to 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 learners from the United States accounted for
high
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a high
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figure
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,
while
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who
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apply
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from Australia showed the
least
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lowest
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figure
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 in
this
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 graph.
Additionally
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, the
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 for United Kingdom
students
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 decreased over the five-year period. Between 2002 and 2005,
although
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 the
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 for Australia began at 10,000, it went down slightly to nearly 9,000.
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, they showed went up from 2004 to 2005.
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 from the US dropped by around 5,000 in the same time frame.
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, the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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UK educators remained unchanged in 2003.
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, from 2005 to 2007, Australian
students
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 remained constant (10,000) compared to
other
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the other
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 two countries. In the same time period,
students
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 from the US increased to 50,000 which is the beginning
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. Throughout the entire period, there are the most significant changes in the proportion of the UK, showing dropped by almost 10,000.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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