The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the UK pupils rate themselves in answer to the question said to what extent they are financially organised.
Also
, the table shows the age group of the
students
responded with very organised.
It is clear that
most of the
students
consider themselves a fairly organised person in terms of financial discipline.
Also
, a large
percentage
of
students
who claim they are very organised are older than others.
According to
the pie chart, a large
percentage
of
students
, 55% answered they are fairly organised,
while
only 4% of them acknowledge they are not organised financially at all. The percentages for not very organised and very organised are close to each other, 20% and 21%, respectively. Looking at the table, which shows the
percentage
of
students
who said they could manage their financial affairs precisely
according to
their age, we can see that the
percentage
of older
students
is almost double that of younger pupils. The
percentage
of
students
that are between 23 and 25 years old is 26%.
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