The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the UK pupils rate themselves in answer to the question said to what extent they are financially organised.
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, the table shows the age group of the
students
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responded with very organised.
It is clear that
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most of the
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consider themselves a fairly organised person in terms of financial discipline.
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, a large
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of
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who claim they are very organised are older than others.
According to
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the pie chart, a large
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of
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, 55% answered they are fairly organised,
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only 4% of them acknowledge they are not organised financially at all. The percentages for not very organised and very organised are close to each other, 20% and 21%, respectively. Looking at the table, which shows the
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of
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who said they could manage their financial affairs precisely
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their age, we can see that the
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of older
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is almost double that of younger pupils. The
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of
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that are between 23 and 25 years old is 26%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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