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The line graph shows the number of kilometers traveled per car in five countries between 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of kilometers traveled per car in five countries between 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates how many
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traveled
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 by each vehicle in the United States, Germany, Britain, France and Japan for twenty years from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the United States citizen
traveled
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 at the highest
kilometres
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 compared to the other countries.
According to
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 the data, people in the United States
traveled
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 more than the remaining four countries over the twenty-year
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 by around 1,800
kilometres
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 taken.
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, the British
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 experienced a steady pattern after rising from about 1,300
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 in 1990
,
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 to approximately 1,400
kilometres
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since
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 1993 until seventeen years later.
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, the Germans occupied their cars by around 1,600
kilometres
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 beginning in 1990 to 2005, before experiencing a decline to 1,400
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 in 2010.
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, the French showed a similar pattern to Germany, starting at around 1,000
kilometres
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 at the outset of the
period
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 until the next fifteen years, the length started to decrease after 2005 and fell down by 10%
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 of the
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.
On the other hand
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, Japan is the country which saw a downward trend from the beginning of the
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although
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 there were slight increases in 2000 and 2005. After starting at around 700
kilometres
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 in early 1990, the number tended to decrease as they reached 400
kilometres
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 in 2010.
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