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In many countries, plastic containers have been more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, as
the
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many business owners
choose
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plastic
packages
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 for their
product
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products
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, it
is
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 widespread in
a
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daily life in many countries.
Although
this
 kind of
containers
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container
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 and
bottles
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bottle
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 takes the minimum cost to produce, it may have
catastrophic
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 impact on
an
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 environment. I do think
product
 owners should be more environmentally friendly and
use
 green
packages
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instead
 of
plastic
. It is
fact
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 that
,
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plastic
 become popular because of its
low-cost
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. Since it is
non-natural
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a non-natural
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product
, the
row
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raw
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 materials of the
product
 synthetically
produce
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 in the laboratories without dependency
to
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 the environment or human
factor
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factors
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. Another advantage of polymers is easy to shape and paint. Many businesses
use
plastic
 to present their own
colorful
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 design and gain consumers
an
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attention in the market. It is hard to imagine
coca-cola
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Coca-Cola
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 without its transparent red
labeled
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labelled
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 bottle
in
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on
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 the shelf of
fridge
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the fridge
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. Yet
this
 is not a place where these bottles end their journey. After
usage
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plastic
container
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containers
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 and bottles fill the
corner
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corners
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 of the roads or garbage.
Additionally
, it is hard to remove them from
earth
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the earth
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 as they are not biodegradable. Which means it takes hundreds or
million
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millions
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years
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of years
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 to decay them. Nature protectors warn about
threat
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the threat
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 of ocean pollution and natural habitat’s vanish. All of
which
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consequence
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 appear in future or today’s world. It
is highly recommend
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 to
use
 more eco-friendly packages like
glass-bottles
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glass bottles
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 or reusable shoppers
instead
 of
plastic
 ones. In conclusion, in spite of
plastic
containers
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containers'
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 cost benefits and marketing advantages, it is not
worthy
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to
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using
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use
. Because it
puts
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more
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a more
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 negative effect on nature and the earth.
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