Write in around 100 words about your activity that you like doing in your free time

I am keen on doing many things in my free time but the most activity is reading
books
.
Well
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Well,
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I actually didn't remember exactly who got me into
this
and how I enjoy it. There are two main reasons
the
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apply
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why I like reading
books
.
Firstly
, reading
books
make
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me relax after school.
Secondly
is
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reading
books
broaden
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broadens
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my knowledge. So I will write the essays more
fluency
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fluently
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. I wish in the future, I will have
an
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my
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own library to read
books
after school or any time I want.
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grammar
To enhance clarity, ensure proper use of articles and possessive pronouns. For instance, 'the most activity' should be 'the activity I enjoy the most'.
conclusion
Include a stronger conclusion, summarizing your main points. This adds more coherence to your response.
examples
Expand on specific examples, such as mentioning particular books or genres that you enjoy. This would provide more depth to your writing.
clarity
You have clearly mentioned the impact of reading on your relaxation and knowledge.
structure
Your essay has a logical flow from introduction to the main points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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