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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say why a driving licence is advantageous • recommend a driving school • give any extra guidance/tips You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear..., You should write at least 150 words.

#minutes #friend #drive #advice #licence #school #guidance #tips #addresses
Dear Akash, How is it going? I heard you are going to learn how to drive and need some help, I have some advice for you which can be very
benificial
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beneficial
 for you and make your learning smoother.
Driving
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 licence has many perks which are very helpful in life, you can find a good job with
good
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 salary because of your driving licence and you can travel without any
hassel
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hassle
 finding public transport on time. There is a good school in Dubai called Dubai Driving Institute, you can learn from there, even I went there and I had an amazing
experiance
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experience
, I think you will like it too. They teach from basic to
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very
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 friendly manner
,
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 and give
feedbacks
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 to help you focus on your mistakes.
Also
 here is a tip, focus on street signs, these will help you
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 the road structures and limits. Get in touch,
Shiwam
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Shivam
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coherence
To enhance the structure of your letter, ensure each main point is clearly separated into distinct paragraphs. This helps readability and organization, making your arguments more compelling.
coherence
In your introduction, provide a little more context to the reader to make it engaging and ensure it flows naturally. It might be beneficial to relate your experience with driving personally to engage your friend further.
language
Avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'beneficial' (instead of 'benificial') and 'hassle' (instead of 'hassel'). This small attention to detail can significantly improve the overall impression.
task achievement
You have comprehensively covered the required points: explaining the advantages of a driving license, recommending a driving school, and providing extra tips. This thoroughness is excellent for task achievement.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for the audience. Maintaining this informal yet informative tone suits the context well.
coherence
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, creating a personable and friendly communication with your friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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