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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph given illustrates data
on
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apply
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between the average of temperatures and the average
on
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of
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three major cities of
sunshine
 per year.the graph relates monthly between
Jan
 and Dec to total the number
hours
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of hours
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 of
sunshine
 in three
country
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countries
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.
Overall
, the number of
sunshine
on
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in
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Jan
 was less than the number of
sunshine
on
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in
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Jul in New
York
.
According to
 the graph, it is noticeable that there is a development. It can be clearly seen that in London,New
York
,Sydney. The numbers of
sunshine
 dropped on
Jan
 around 4 in New
York
.
On the other hand
, there was a rise between
Jan
 and Mar about 13 in London at
hours
. During,recent years the numbers of
sunshine
 rose
siginifacant
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significant
 approximately 30
hours
 in New
York
.
Than
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, there was a drop
siginfacant
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significant
 on Dec about 5
hours
.
Also
, there was
seam
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a seam
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 between London and New
York
.
Moreover
, there was fluctuation in Sydney one
years
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year
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 ago. Regarding to given data, it is remarkable that there is a leap.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sunshine, jan, hours, york with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • temperature fluctuations
  • range
  • significant differences
  • average number of hours of sunshine per year
  • highlight
  • relate
  • patterns
  • comparisons
  • major cities
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