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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges related not only to the environment, but pollution and education as well. What problems your country will face in next years.

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In
this
 cutting-edge era,most companies are facing various problems,
it
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which
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 may be related to poverty, education ,and unemployment.
However
 ,nations across the globe
suffering
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 the important challenges,which is not regarding the environment,but the contamination and schooling as well.
This
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predominant
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the predominant
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 issues
facing
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faced
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 by our country in
coming
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the coming
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 year,
along with
 a relevant conclusion. To commence with, nowadays,the most
familar
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familiar
trends
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trend
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are
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is
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the
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migration,which leads to
decreasing
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a decrease in
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the population.If the population reduces ,the various companies do not
gets
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get
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enough
staffs
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staff
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,
therefore
 they need to
depends
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depend
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 on other states.Which causes higher
expense
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expenses
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.
For example
,nowadays skilled workers
such
 as nurses and doctors have moved to Europe.So the hospitals could not maintain
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the nurse-patient
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 ratio equally.
That is
 why, they are recruiting
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staff from other provinces.which
becomes
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has become
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 more expensive.
Secondly
,in the next year,the professional colleges
have
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closed
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close
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 permanently ,because the students are
fascinating
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fascinated
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to study
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with studying
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 in
the
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European countries and they wish to settle there with
families
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their families
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.
Besides
 that,
student's
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student
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 counts have decreased in
the
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diverse
institution
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institutions
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and
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apply
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which
are
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is
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 causing the teachers to
loss
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 their
job
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jobs
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.
For instance
,From India ,
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of youngsters
gone
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go
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 to Canada and
UK
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the UK
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 for study
purpose
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.After the completion of
studies
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studies,
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 they got Permanent Residents.Which
makes
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negative
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a negative
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impacts
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impact
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 on
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the territories
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territories
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territory
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 economic system.
To conclude
,In 2025 ,our country become down economically.Because ,if the populace
decrease
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,these countries do not get enough tax which causes poverty.The various companies do not work properly and hospitals do not run smoothly without enough nursing staff.Most trainers
loss
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lose
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 their jobs
due to
 the deficiency of
students
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student
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count
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counts
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.which leads to
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 of many people.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and structure. Use topic sentences to guide the reader.
task achievement
Address all parts of the prompt more directly. Explain how these challenges can be addressed or what measures need to be taken.
task achievement
The essay presents clear and relevant examples to support the points made.
coherence cohesion
Both the introduction and conclusion are present and provide a framework for the essay.

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