The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In the chart
presented
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we can observe the popularity of 7 sports among adults in the years 1997 and 2017. A 20
years
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year
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timeframe outlies major differences in the number of adults
paying
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playing
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basketball, cricket, football, and rugby. One sport that has suffered a dramatic increase in the amount of players is
footbal
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football
, jumping from around 30
thousand
participant
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in 1997 to almost 50
thousand
in 2017. An activity with a noticeable decrease in popularity is cricket, going from 25
thousand
players to below 10
thousand
, the lowest data point on the chart. We can
also
highlight swimming, which has remained consistent in the time period presented. By analyzing the chart we can observe increased percentages of players for most of the sports.
Consequently
, it can be affirmed that exercising has gained popularity in the past two decades. There are many factors that have possibly impacted
this
growth in participation,
such
as televised events and encouragement towards a healthy lifestyle.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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