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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The graph shows the number of International
students
 who
study
 in three universities from five different countries. Most of the International
students
 are from India and least of them are from Colombia.
University
Correct article usage
The University
show examples
 of
Riverview
 is
the
Correct article usage
apply
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one that has more international
students
 rather than other
universitie
Correct your spelling
universities
. Colombia has sent under 2000
students
for
Change preposition
to
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 each
university
.
Meanwhile
Add a comma
Meanwhile,
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 India has sent more than 7000 pupils to
University
Correct article usage
the University
show examples
 of
Riverview
 and
this
 number is doubled rather than
students
 from Vietnam. The proportion of pupils from Indonesia who
study
in
Change preposition
at
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 Smithtown
University
,
University
 of
Riverview
,
aand
Correct your spelling
and
 Earlwood
University
 is proportional which
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 1000, 1500, and 1000, respectively.
Furthermore
, International
students
 from Vietnam are mostly choosing to
study
 at the
University
 of
Riverview
 with
doubled
Correct pronoun usage
its doubled
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 population rather than
vietnam's
Change the capitalization
Vietnam's
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 international
students
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 Smithtown
University
. There are 4000 pupils from
nepal
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Nepal
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choose
Correct pronoun usage
who choose
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 to
study
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 Smithtown
University
 and Earlwood
University
 and up to 5000
students
decide
Verb problem
choose
show examples
 the
University
 of
Riverview
 as their decision.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, study, university, riverview with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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