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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The graph shows the number of International
students
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 who
study
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 in three universities from five different countries. Most of the International
students
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 are from India and least of them are from Colombia.
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University
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The University
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 of
Riverview
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 is
the
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apply
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one that has more international
students
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 rather than other
universitie
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universities
. Colombia has sent under 2000
students
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for
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to
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 each
university
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.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 India has sent more than 7000 pupils to
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University
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the University
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 of
Riverview
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 and
this
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 number is doubled rather than
students
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 from Vietnam. The proportion of pupils from Indonesia who
study
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in
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at
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 Smithtown
University
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,
University
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 of
Riverview
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,
aand
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and
 Earlwood
University
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 is proportional which
are
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is
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 1000, 1500, and 1000, respectively.
Furthermore
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, International
students
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 from Vietnam are mostly choosing to
study
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 at the
University
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 of
Riverview
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 with
doubled
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its doubled
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 population rather than
vietnam's
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Vietnam's
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 international
students
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in
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at
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 Smithtown
University
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. There are 4000 pupils from
nepal
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Nepal
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choose
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who choose
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 to
study
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in
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at
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 Smithtown
University
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 and Earlwood
University
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 and up to 5000
students
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decide
Verb problem
choose
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 the
University
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 of
Riverview
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 as their decision.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, study, university, riverview with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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