In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to the cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The occurrence of urbanization has

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on

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the population in the countryside which

are

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mostly decided to move to the

cities

.

This

development has both negative and positive effects on society.

However

, though urbanization has some disadvantages, it is strongly believed that its benefits outweigh the drawbacks. It is true that life in the

city

has a high cost of living and there are several

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issues in the

cities

. For the cost of living, food and housing are more expensive than in the rural

area

.

This

can be compared to the price of similar food in

suburbs

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and the outskirts

area

,

for

instance

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the price of watermelon outside the

city

area

certainly

have

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lower prices compared to the countryside.

Moreover

, the problems occurring in the

cities

such

as

the

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traffic congestion are faced by the

people

living in the

cities

which could be considered as

one

of the drawbacks of living in the

cities

.

Nevertheless

, the advantages of living in the

cities

should not be put down by any chance.

City

life offers many benefits

such

as job

opportunities

and

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convenience in transportation and better medical services. For job

opportunities

,

people

could find more

opportunities

in searching for jobs with high salaries which could improve their standard of living. It can be clearly seen that there are a plethora of leading businesses located in the urban

area

which means

people

living in the

city

could seek better job

opportunities

than living in the countryside. To be more specific,

people

in the legal fields tend to move to the middle of the

city

to get

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jobs at the leading firms.

Furthermore

, there are better

transportations

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transportation

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and medical services located in the

city

, meaning that

people

can live their

life

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lives

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more convenient than living in the outskirts

area

.

City

transportation includes various types of vehicles that can only be seen in the

city

area

,

for example

, sky train, hi-speed train and

electric-bus

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. Apart from the transportation, the medical services in the

city

are

one

of

reasons

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the reasons

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for

people

to relocate themselves to the

city

. To demonstrate, there are plenty of advanced medical technology which could provide better treatment for the patient in a severe state.

For instance

, Chemotherapy is

one

of the advanced technologies for demolishing malignant cancer.

This

technology could be

one

of the ways for

people

to live longer. In conclusion, even though living in the

city

has some disadvantages, it is evident that there are several advantages, causing

people

to relocate themselves to the

city

area

.

This

development provides positive development for

people

in the

city

.