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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
#bar #student #enrolments #three #universities #summarise #information #features #comparison
The illustrated bar chart represents
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the data
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data
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the
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 number of
students
 who got
there
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their
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admisssion
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admission
 within
mentioned
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the mentioned
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 five countries in three universities.
To begin
 with,
University
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the University
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 of
riverview
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Riverview
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 was consistently on top by
significant
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a significant
the significant
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 number of
students
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student
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 admissions.
Following with
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Followed
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the
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apply
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Earwood
university
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University
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 at second
averagely
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average
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 and at
last
the
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apply
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Smithtown
univeristy
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university
.
However
,
while
 comparing each country's
data
, it can be observed that India got the most
students
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student
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 enrollments where each
university
 admission varied by over 1000
students
 enrollment.
This
data
 changed in terms of Nepal, Smithtown and
earlwood
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Earlwood University
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university
reach
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reaching
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 a
plataue
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plateau
plate
plateaued
 state
although
riverview
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Riverview
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university
 peaked with 1000 more admissions than others. Vietnam showed
a
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apply
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different
data
, least admitted
university
 was Smithtown
university
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University
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 with
least
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a least
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at
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apply
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over 1000 averagely low than other institutions.
indonesia
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Indonesia
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 and
columbia
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Columbia
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 were the countries whose
students
 chose to go
these
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to these
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 universities with less than 1000 enrollments.
Overall
,
University
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the University
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 of Riverview had the most admissions
while
Indomesia
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Indonesia
 and Colombia had the least participation in
universities
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university
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 enrollment. Nepal and
vietman
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Vietnam
 maintained
a
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apply
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steady
university
enrollments
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enrollment
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, students, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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