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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
number
 of
people
 in three different countries who
move
Wrong verb form
moved
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 from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025 as a prediction.
The urbanisation
Correct article usage
Urbanisation
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was
Verb problem
has
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increase
Replace the word
increased
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 from 2000 until these days and it
was predicting
Wrong verb form
is predicted
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 will continue to increase until 2025. More than 15
millions
Change to singular
million
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 residents in Russia moved to
city
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the city
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 in 2000 and
this
number
 was higher than the
number
 of urbanisation in Iran.
In contrast
, the prediction informs that there will be more than 90
millions
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million
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people
 in Iran
will
Correct pronoun usage
who will
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 move to urban areas, but no more than 90
millions
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million
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 citizens in Russia choose to leave the rural areas. In 2000 it was recorded that the movement of
people
 from rural to urban in Indonesia only 10
millions
Change to singular
million
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people
.
In addition
, the
number
 of
people
 in Indonesia slightly increased from 2000 to 2020 but there
were
Change the verb form
was
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 a prediction that the
number
 of
people
 who chose to live in urban will
stable
Add a missing verb
be stable
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 until 2025.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 3 times.
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