Some people think that all children should learn geography in school. However some others think that it is more important to learn subjects that are more relevant to life. What is your opinion?

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some
people that think, that
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of time, the others think that all
school
students have to study it
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compulsory
. In my humble opinion,
geography
is one of the essential courses in the
school
program for several reasons. First and foremost, all of us have to know as much as possible about our motherland,
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its
geography
and geology, political and
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state, agriculture and industry, which are studying
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geography
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a couple of years.
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a shame not to know what is the capital city of your own country, or what
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it looks like on the world map. I think
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knowledge
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the basic point of
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love and
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respect
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your country. Students have to study the
geography
of the places near and far from their home city,
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on excursions with their teachers. I remember that I had studied a lot of interesting things about the suburbs of my home city
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excursions, and it was one of the reasons
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the choice of my first profession - I studied
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geology
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the University. The second reason for studying
geography
is the second part of the
course
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world
geography
. We have to get acquainted with our neighbours. Nowadays, by and large,
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travelling abroad
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more and more popular. So the average citizen
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to know where he
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to
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travel
without confuse between Austria and Australia.
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, we can plan our journey by
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with our geographic knowledge. In
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conclusion, I think that
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geography
at
school
is one of the most important
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, we have to remain it, and even
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, and the world
goverments
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governments
government
have to contribute more money to
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