Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

These days, people mostly prefer transnational travel for
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communicatıon for humanity , and to discover the world.İnternational tourism will increase in
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of people. First of all,If we want to dıscuss how we can decrease of tensıon between people from different places and
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The essay presents a clear opinion and starts with an interesting introduction.
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The writer shows an understanding of the topic by discussing the potential of international tourism to bring benefits.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • cultural exchange
  • misunderstandings
  • stereotypes
  • disrespectful
  • inappropriate
  • fostering understanding
  • appreciation
  • direct interactions
  • shared experiences
  • personal connections
  • promoting peace
  • global understanding
  • exposing individuals
  • preconceived notions
  • biases
  • cultural sensitivity training
  • community-driven tourism initiatives
  • responsible tourism
  • sustainable tourism practices
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