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Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #competition #work #school #life
In modern society, people are divided
two
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group
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 by the idea of
both
competition
 and corporation. Some think that
competition
 promotes individuality and innovation,
while
 others believe that there are more chances to improve things in corporations.
This
 essay will examine
both
 perspectives and provide personal insights into
this
 intriguing topic. One key argument in
favor
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 of
competition
 is that it drives individuals to push their limits and achieve higher levels of success. Whether it is in the workplace, at school or in daily life, rivalry encourages contestants to do their best and improve
both
 mental and physical abilities.
Furthermore
, the passion for reward or victory can foster personal growth, motivation, and a strong work ethic. In
this
 period, individuals have an opportunity to determine their unique talents and develop their abilities in order to stand out from the crowd.
On the other hand
, corporation is found more beneficial to bound
friendship
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friendships
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 in every environment.
This
 means that it helps to share ideas, discuss
both
 sides of decisions, correct defects of others
and
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etc.
Moreover
, in
such
 a condition, people feel
confidence
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for
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 their team or teammates and can achieve significant goals. In classrooms or workplaces where cooperation thrives, individuals can complement each other's strengths, leading to improved outcomes and mutual growth.
To sum up
, I believe that we, humankind should use the two for the key to success. Indeed,
while
competition
 and cooperation may appear to be opposing forces, finding a balance between the two is essential for
overall
 success.
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task achievement
Consider providing more relevant and specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, citing real-life examples or studies can make your points more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea and uses clear transitions to ensure a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay does a good job of presenting both sides of the argument and maintains a balanced view throughout.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-structured, providing clear insights into the essay's main points and wrapping up the discussion effectively.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • excel
  • outperform
  • advancements
  • academic standards
  • work ethic
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • unhealthy rivalries
  • harmonious
  • supportive
  • collaborative learning
  • social skills
  • communication skills
  • sense of community
  • collective goals
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