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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The provided line graph gives information about the
number
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 of shop closures and openings in a particular area between 2011 and 2018
Overall
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, there was a fluctuation in the
number
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 of closed and opened
stores
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. The
number
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 of closed
shops
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 recorded a racket bottom in a specific.
To begin
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 with, the
number
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 of closed and open
stores
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 begin at about 6500 and 8500 respectively. The sections had a significant decrease in 2012 to reach 6000 closed
shops
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 and 4000 new
shops
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. 2013 experienced a gradual increase in closures and opening of
shops
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.
While
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 the new
stores
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 continued to increase at 6000, the closed
shops
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 decreased gradually to about 6500 in 2014.
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, in 2015 the
number
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 of
stores
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 which was closed hit the rocket button of 500 markets,
also
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 new
shops
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 experienced a sharp decrease to 4000
shops
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. Both sections remain stable in 2016 and 2017.
However
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, new
shops
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 had a drop in 2018
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, stores, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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