Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone's lives. Some people say that advertising is positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views include your opinion.
Advertisements
have become more popular because of their impact on businesses by enhancing their marketing. Then
, many would argue that advertising promotions have impacted positively on humankind and they are necessary in order to promote the sales of cutting-edge designs. Nevertheless
, I staunchly consider that those campaigns should be controlled and carefully managed. In this
essay, I will explain my reasons in detail.
To star
with, it is Correct your spelling
start
well-known
that advertising is a field that has reached high achievements because it improves the financial projections Correct your spelling
well known
in
all Change preposition
of
companies
by attracting more population to acquire their products. As a consequence
of this
, nowadays, most companies
are widely known, either nationally and
internationally. Correct word choice
or
Then
, all brands create more campaings
in order to be more Correct your spelling
campaigns
campaign
appealed
and popularize their products by using them, Replace the word
appealing
such
as banners, flyers, online strategies, etc. For instance
, since McDonalds have created most commercials showing their 'fresh' and 'high-quality' food, they have sold more than 6 billion of
dollars and their profits have rocketed up to uncharted levels.
Change preposition
apply
Conversely
, although
advertising campaings
have many upsides in the economic field of most factories, there are some stumbling blocks that should be taken into consideration. Correct your spelling
campaigns
Firstly
, designers and produces
try to manipulate the content in all promotional messages in order to persuade people and catch their attention. Replace the word
producers
Secondly
, most companies
have signed contract
with professionals who study people's Fix the agreement mistake
contracts
behivours
Correct your spelling
behaviour
as well as
traits to focus their sales on a specific type of population. Consequently
, people might make decisions about buying new products because of the content of the advertisements
insted
of because they really need them. Correct your spelling
instead
For instance
, sociologist research have
proved that most pets' Change the verb form
has
advertisements
are related to a sentimental meaning in communities.
To sum up
, despite the fact advertisements
are widely used and its
usage Correct pronoun usage
their
have
had a positive impact Change the verb form
has
in
all Change preposition
on
companies
, some features should be taken into account by evaluating their impact on societies and consumerism.Submitted by luciaagudelomotta on
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task achievement
Work on providing more balanced arguments for both views, expanding on the negative aspects of advertising as well.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion fully encapsulates the main points discussed in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Provide clearer transitions between your arguments to improve the overall flow and readability.
task achievement
You have a strong introduction that captures the task at hand effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically structured with clear distinctions between different parts of the discussion.
task achievement
You provided relevant specific examples, such as the McDonald's advertisement impact, to support your main points.