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Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have accepted the offer to pursue my post-graduation course in Finance next year and I am writing to get more details about the accommodation provided by
college
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 with, I look forward to
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 an economical option since I would be taking a student loan. I am open to personal or a shared room, not more than 2 people. Having an east-side view would be
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preferable.
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, I prefer vegetarian meals since I have stopped eating meat
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 recent health issues.
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, I still consume eggs and milk.
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introduction-conclusion present
Consider adding a concluding sentence to summarize your request and reiterate your appreciation.
logical structure
Ensure that each point flows smoothly to the next to enhance readability.
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay is clear and provides comprehensive ideas on the accommodation preferences.
supported main points
The main points of economical accommodation, room preference, and dietary requirements are well-supported.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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