The map shows the conditon of Stockford City in 1986 andthe present time.

The map shows the conditon of Stockford City in 1986 andthe present time.
The two maps illustrate the transformation of
Stockford
City
in 1986 and its present layout. The most noticeable change
to
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Stockford
City
is the increase in housing. Back
then
, the
city
had a shop and post office to the west of its only primary school, and
while
the post office stayed the same, the shop
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converted into houses. The northeast of the primary school used to be occupied by farmland, but it was demolished and more houses were added in its place. The primary school itself was renovated with more buildings. Roughly in the middle of the 1986 map was a garden with a large house, redeveloped into a retirement home with a smaller lawn. To the southwest corner near the river stroke was another area of farmland, which has been modernized into living spaces. Despite all the changes to
Stockford
City
, both its bridge and post office remained relatively untouched. The main road connecting all its facilities did not see any change either, apart from the addition of new branches. In conclusion,
Stockford
City
has experienced a great alteration to its man-made facilities, which mainly focused on maximizing housing space.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stockford, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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