The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The he table and charts below give

 nformation on the police budget for

 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.

 I'he table shows where the money came

 From and the charts show how it was

 distributed.

 Summarise the information by

 selecting and reporting the main

 Features, and make comparisons where

 relevant.
The table shows the police estimation for 2 years in a Britain region
whereas
the charts
illutrate
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illustrate
illustrated
information about how the money was spent in 2017 and 2018. The most significant facts to emerge from the graphs are that the police budget in 2018 was higher than that in 2017
while
the salaries (officer and staff) dominated
in
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all expenditures for 2 years. Looking at the details, the biggest
sources
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of police budget was National Government
that
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earned 175.5 in 2017 and 177, 8m in 2018.
Next,
local taxes recourses which got 91.2m in 2017
then
there was rising from
this
source of approximately 11,1m in 2018.
While other
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sources (eg grants) in 2017 and 2018 supported 38m and 38,6m respectively. Moving to expenditure, the salaries (officer and staff) were the highest expenses which the money was distributed for
this
at 75% in 2017 and
this
expenditure decreased to 69% in 2018
while
the technology spending in 2018 was not as low as in 2017 with 14% compared to 4%
whereas
the buildings and transports just spent 17% in both years.
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