The graph below shows home heating fuel choice according to the year the house was built. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates information about the percentages of
home
heating fuel in electricity
and natural gas
between 1950 and 2010.
Overall
, Natural gas
remained steady in the given period
between before
1950 and1969. experienced a downward trend, Change preposition
apply
while
electricity
showed an upward trend throughout the period
. Both choice’s
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choices’
home
rates ended up in the same percentage in
the Change preposition
from
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
of
1990 to 2010.
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apply
Although
electricity
initially
had a lower rate
, it surpassed natural gas
at the end
of the period
.
Natural gas
’s home
rate
was about 60% in early 1950, higher than electricity
’s rate
by approximately 45%. Then
, it remained steady until 1969. However
, the figure showed a slight decrease to about 18% in 1970 and continued to decline steadily until reaching around 42% in 1989. And the
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The
rate
remained steady to
the end of the Change preposition
until
period
until
2010.
Meanwhile, the percentage of Change preposition
in
home
heating fuel in electricity
was less than 20% in early of the year. However
, it gradually increased for the next year and the growth rose and eventually
the Add a comma
eventually,
rate
reached the natural gas
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words home, electricity, gas, period, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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