The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The information represented in
chart
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the chart
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is about
UAE
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the UAE
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government budget for
year
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the year
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2000.
Overall
, the graph includes all government
spendings
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spending
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devided
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divided
into categories,
thus
it is not complicated to retrieve the data about each part
as well as
the total. The pie diagram consists of 10 pieces coloured
different
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,
therefore
easy to understand
what is
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the magnitude of each section.
Additionally
, the title
appear
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inside or by the side for each part. Clearly, the largest fee was
spend
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spent
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for social security, and for transport a few. The huge amount of money
takes
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health and personal social services, and education. Except
of
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transport
area
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areas
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,
the
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apply
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law and order, and housing
herritage
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heritage
and environment
doesn't
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get a large part of
budget
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the budget
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. In conclusion, the round graph creates an
opportuninty
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opportunity
for quick and comfortable data usage and makes the provided set clear. Even without
numbers
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it is fully understandable what remuneration which department has.
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