The diagram shows the stages and equpiment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagram shows the stages and equpiment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building  purposes.
The two diagrams illustrate the steps and equipment involved in the production of
cement
and the way in which
cement
is used to make concrete.
Overall
, limestone and clay pass through four stages before being bagged
ready
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and ready
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for use as
cement
.
Cement
is
then
combined with three other materials to create concrete.
While
the process of making
cement
uses a number of tools, the production of concrete is simpler and requires only a concrete mixer. In the first stage of making
cement
, limestone and clay are crushed together to form a powder.
This
powder is
then
passed through a mixer before being subjected to heat in a rotating heater. The resulting mixture is ground in order to produce
cement
which is
then
packed in bags ready to be used. Regarding the second diagram, concrete consists of mainly gravel which is small stones, and
this
makes up 50% of the ingredients. The other materials used are sand (25%),
cement
(15%) and water (10%). These are all poured in a concrete mixer which continually rotates to combine the materials and ultimately produce concrete.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crushing
  • limestone
  • clay
  • fine powder
  • rotating kiln
  • chemical transformations
  • clinker
  • gypsum
  • setting time
  • aggregates
  • gravel
  • sand
  • proportions
  • strong
  • versatile
  • building material
  • measure
  • combine
  • ratio
  • properties
  • poured
  • molds
  • set
  • harden
  • construction purposes
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