The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

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The two pictures compared the layout and features of an industrial
area
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in the town of Norbiton.
Overall
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,
It is clear that
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some main changes will be completely made in terms of the use of the
area
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. There will be developments with regard to shops and housing. At present, we can see that there are eight factories, all of which will be demolished.
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, it appears that the plan is to build seven housings for residents in various places. One will be built at the top of the
area
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, three will be located in the centre along the road below the river, and the remaining will be built in the southeastern part of the
area
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. It seems that the road will be expanded across the river to the north. There will be one smaller ring road close to the medical centre. Some new buildings
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as shops, medical centre, playground and school will be
also
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constructed.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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