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the oie chart show different types of wash disposed of in on country in 1960 and 2011.

the oie chart show different types of wash disposed of in on country in 1960 and 2011.
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The pie chart
provide
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provides
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 various
kind
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kinds
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 of
wast
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waste
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 calculated in a monopoly in four decades from 1960 to 2011.
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, it can be seen that
while
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 in 1960 the highest percentage belonged to
paper
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 industry, in the
21
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21st
 century it turned to plastic.
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 with, in 1960 there was a fraction of
fourth
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 in paper manufacturing. The textile industry came with 17
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percent
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. Food
consuming
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as well as
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 other fields were
same
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the same
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that is
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percent
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. The lowest figures 4 and 5 percentage
was
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 about wood and glass making. In
plastic
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the plastic
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 and metal industries’ the point was doubled to 8
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percent
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per cent
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.
On the
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contrary
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 there was 9
percent
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 of green Wasting. Afterwards, in
the
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2011 the littlest points
was
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 found
out
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in other fields and glass producing
that is
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percent
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per cent
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. It has been doubled to 8
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percent
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 in the field of wood making. By having one more ( 9
percent
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 )came metal and green waste industries. There was only 11
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percent
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 of textile production and similar results of paper and plastic production
that is
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 15 and 18. The top point in the list was about
food
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 industry.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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