In most of the developing and under-developed countries, well-educated professionals prefer to leave their nations after completing their studies and do jobs in developed countries. What are the reasons behind this problem? Suggest some solutions too.

Nowadays, an increasing number of professionals decide to leave their home
countries
after university, in order to find adequate
jobs
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opportunities and have higher salaries. There are many reasons behind
this
migratory phenomenon. Developed
countries
often provide much more
jobs
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opportunities compared to under-developed
countries
.
Moreover
, moving to another reality is seen as
chance
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to have a stable work.
Furthermore
, some
countries
provide superior equipment for certain
jobs
:
many
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doctors or dentists leave their home
countries
because foreign hospitals and clinics have newer
gears
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to support their work in a better way.
In addition
, salaries in high-developed
countries
are
ofter
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often
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higher. Another reason that leads professionals is a better living standard. In order to reduce
the
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migration, governments and politicians of under-developed
countries
should invest more money
on
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education and facilities. They should be able to pay professionals more and provide them
the
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right stuff to complete their
jobs
.
Moreover
, governments should improve living
standars
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standards
, lowering crime rates and better social services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Economic factors
  • Job opportunities
  • Living standards
  • Research infrastructure
  • Career advancement
  • Political stability
  • Social services
  • Exodus
  • Incentive programs
  • Competitive salaries
  • Professional migration
  • Investments in education
  • Home countries
  • Corruption
  • Incentive programs
  • Adequate job opportunities
  • Political institutions
  • Lower crime rates
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