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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
 maps illustrate
comparison
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 in
improvement
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the improvement
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 of the
city
 of Stromer between 1995 and now.
Overall
, it is clear from the maps that there
were
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was
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 farmland,
two
 houses,
two
 forests, and
shop
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a shop
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 in 1995,
while
 now, there are theose
and
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an
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 airport, school,
additional
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an additional
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 forest, and apartments.
Accordin
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According
 to what is shown, in 1995, farmland was located in
south
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the south
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 of
stromer
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Stromer
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,which formed approximately a third of town and
shop
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shops
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 in
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the middel
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middel
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middle
 of
city
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the city
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.There were
two
 forests, one was lie in west and another in
east
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the east
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 of town. Houses were near from shop. Now, there are three
forest
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forests
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 and six apartments, four of them
have
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are
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 located
in
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apply
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south of
stromer
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Stromer
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 and
two
 of them in
north
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the north
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.
School
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 is lie in
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of the
city
 and there are
large
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a large
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 number of
shopes
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shoppes
shops
aroud
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around
 it. There is
airport
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an airport
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 in the north part of
city
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the city
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 between
two
 forests and
small
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a small
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framland
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farmland
 has located in
south
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the south
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 of
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the cite
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cite
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city
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,it is next to
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the apartment
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apartment
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apartments
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 and
house
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houses
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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