The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares pupils from
a schools
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schools
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in the UK, who had participated in four various sports namely running, basketball, swimming, and
football
in 2001 and 2011.
Overall
, participation in running
and
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football
, and swimming increased,
while
participation in running had dropped to the lowest
participated
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participation
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category. All categories had seen heavy fluctuations,
football
accounted
60
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% right before reaching
to
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70% in 2002. In subsequent years,
football
followed
same
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the same
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pattern and accounted65% in 2007 and
then
gradually increased to 70% right before
small
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a small
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dip in 2011 which was around 69%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words football with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • gender distribution
  • new entrants
  • drop in participation
  • continuation/discontinuation
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