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you have read a articel in nation newspaper which clains that town centers in the country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion writre a letter to the editor of newspaper in you letter say which points in the article you agree with explains ways in which your center is differnet from most of town centers offer to give a guided tour of your town cenetr to the writer of article

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Dear Sir or Madam, The reason for writing
this
 letter is to give my opinion on your recent article about town centres in the country, which you published in the newspaper named The Times. First of all, I
agreed
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 with the point, that most of the main squares have some similarities including their structure as of their
alook
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look
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similar shape and organisation.
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 would like to center your attention on a town center located in the core of the city named Star Square. It is quite different from most of the city places
due to
 its unique architecture and modern design. The entrance is surrounded by
beautiful
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 fountain, followed by an underground subway. which is not common in other cities.
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, it has over 50 shops and a big food quote. There is a conference room with
occupancy
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 of 150 people.
At the end
, I would offer you a tour of a star square, that may help you to change your opinion. If you decide to come please contact me at my email. I shall be very happy to assist you. Yours Faithfully
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language
Work on refining sentence structures and grammar. For instance, "as of their alook a similar shape and organisation" should be rephrased for clarity.
content
Try to expand on your explanation about Star Square, providing more detailed descriptions and perhaps historical significance or cultural importance to make your point stronger.
coherence
Ensure logical progression between your points to enhance coherence. Linking words such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'In addition' can be beneficial.
structure
Conclude your letter formally by adding a slight closing remark before 'Yours Faithfully' to give your writing a more polished finish.
task response
You directly addressed the task and provided relevant personal opinions and examples that are specific and believable.
structure
The structure of your letter includes a clear introduction and conclusion. The main body is divided into coherent paragraphs.
engagement
Your offer to give a guided tour of the town center adds a personal and engaging touch, showing your willingness to provide concrete evidence for your viewpoint.

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