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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided line graph gives information about the proportion of imported countries, including
China
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,
India
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, Japan and the United States of America from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the Japanese were the most popular customers who imported at the beginning of the years.
However
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,
Chinese
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the Chinese
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 were the highest common clients
at the end
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 of the year. Indians continued to be the lowest people who bought from Australia over the period of time.
To begin
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 with,
India
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 and
China
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, where the least two countries listed. In 1990 began at about three per cent and two per cent respectively.
India
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 remained stable at around three per cent until 2000,
while
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China
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 increased gradually to 5%. Indians and Chinese continued to rise significantly at about 7% and 25% respectively. Meanwhile,
India
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 reached the rocket bottom at 5% ,
China
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 hit a peak of approximately 27%.
On the other hand
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, the rate of Australian exports to America fluctuation from 1990 to 2012 from about 11% to 7%. Even though
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 the percentage of exported products was the high ranking in Japan in 1990 at nearly 26%, it witnessed a dramatic decline until 2012 to almost 18 percentage

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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • fluctuate
  • steady increase/decrease
  • notable rise/drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • export destinations
  • trade relations
  • upsurge
  • downturn
  • economic ties
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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