THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist

 arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph demonstrates data about the
number
of global travellers
in particular
countries, including Brazil, Egypt, Malaysia, France, and the USA from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the rate of tourists arriving in the whole area
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increased. The United States of America was the most common country in the
number
of commuters. Meanwhile, Brazil and Egypt were the least popular regions for travellers.
To begin
with, America witnessed the highest
number
of international travelling from 1995 to 2005 with 72
million
tourists to approximately 85
million
people.
while
it witnessed a gradual decrease from 2006 to 2010 which was around 18
million
persons.
In addition
, the
number
of global tourists in France
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began
at nearly 30,000,000 , it had a dramatic increase and hit a peak in 2010 at about 80
million
.
Furthermore
, at almost 24,000,000 in 1995
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it had a significant increase until 2010 with about 44
million
individuals.
While
Brazil and Egypt were the lowest visiting among the countries they experienced a sharp price until 2010.
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