Some people argue that tourism brings more benefits than problems to a country, while others believe that tourism causes more harm than good. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Tourism

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is a global industry

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any

country

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that brings both negative and positive changes.

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is why; some people think that

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is more beneficial to a

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others argue that

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does more damage than good to a

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. I believe

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more advantages than disadvantages. One of the primary advantages of

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is that it contributes to economic development.

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means

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apply

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tourist

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tourists

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spend money, on lodging, food and

sight-seeing

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sightseeing

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visiting different historical and natural places of different parts of

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country

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the country

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encouraging economic development.

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, they post pictures

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social media which influences other people to visit those places which leads to

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influx of migrators and thereby,

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adds to more collection of money.

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disadvantages

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is that it does

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task achievement

Ensure a complete response by fully discussing both views of the argument. In this essay, the disadvantages of tourism are mentioned but not expanded upon.

coherence cohesion

Include a clear conclusion to wrap up the essay. Right now, the essay ends abruptly without a clear conclusion to reaffirm the overall opinion.

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Use specific examples to support your arguments. Instead of general statements, provide concrete instances where tourism has either benefitted or harmed a country.

coherence cohesion

Improve paragraph structure for better coherence. Develop each idea in a separate paragraph and ensure logical flow between points.

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The essay clearly states an opinion, which provides insight into the writer's stance on the topic.

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The introduction sets the stage well, making it clear what the essay will discuss.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

132 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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