The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
The diagram compares the
amount
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number
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of people who
born
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were born
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in
Australia
and outside
Australia
, living
rural
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in rural
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, city and town areas between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, during
this
fiftin-year
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fiftieth-year
period, people who
born
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were born
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in
city
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the city
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remained the biggest indicator, with all two other places much less on them. In 1995
born
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those born
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in
Australia
spent the least amount of year,
While
who
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those who
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born
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were born
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outside spent about as much as each other,
show
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showing
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the indicator where it is higher.
However
, by 2010, the gap in borning between
this
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these
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two statistics had widened and considerably more outside than in
city
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the city
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. As can be seen from the graph, the
amount
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number
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of people born outside
Australia
in 2010 increased but
decrease
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decreased
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other
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the other
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two. It is noticed that in 1995 the
higgest
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highest
biggest
index was 60 and in 2010 was 80. The period between 1995 and 2010 saw
a
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apply
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sharp growth and in 2010 the
Australians
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number of Australians
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decreased who
born
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were born
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in towns and villages as much as they did in 1995.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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